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Thursday, 3 January 2013

Self-Introduction

I want to introduce myself first. My name is Jung Dae Hyun. I'm first to make my Google account and Blogger. I'm the only child of my parents and I have been the president of my elementary schol and I love to play soccer and to play smart phone games. My favorite movie is Harry Potter and the Goble of Fire. I'm very interested at world history, English, and soccer leagues. I expect that my blog could be enjoyed by many others.
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  1. Anonymous9 January 2013 at 03:16

    FIX:
    line 1: I'm ... my -> It's my first time to make a
    line 2: Google account and Blogger -> Google and Blogger account
    line 2: of my parents -> in my family
    line 3: schol and I -> school. I (spelling)
    line 3: take out "to play" before "smart phone"
    line 4: Goble -> Goblet
    line 4: at -> in
    line 5: could -> would

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  2. Anonymous9 January 2013 at 03:19

    Fair and square. A little short, but pretty good writing. There are some awkward expressions, so you should just fix them and get used to the correct expressions.

    So you are Mr. President at your school. Congrats! I hope you learn more in the camp and apply it to your job at your school. Nice to meet you!

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